Sunday, 2 January 2011

No Kiss blogfest

Yay for the 2nd annual No Kiss blog fest, hosted by Frankie Mallis

I do love a good kissing scene, but I love writing almost kissing scenes. I do love to torture my characters romantically. So here is a bit from my previous wip. I've had to adapt it a little bit for length, but the no kiss action is in there.

   “Ava,” he said, voice gruff. “I didn’t say I wouldn’t help you.” His voice softened.
As he edged closer, my heart beat like a Hummingbird’s wings. So loud it was as if the whole world would hear. He brushed my hair behind my ear. My skin sizzled as his index finger traced my cheekbone, his thumb sliding along my jaw line, to my lips. I glanced away, desperate to escape the hypnotizing effect he had over me. 
He caught my chin with the tip of his fingers and reconnected our gaze. His blue eyes locked on mine.
    “I…” The words stuck in my throat, now dry as the Sahara, while he traced the curve of my bottom lip. “I didn’t think-”
   “I cared?” He said. “Of course I care. Why do you think I’ve been watching out for you?”
  “Is that what it was? I thought you were being a pain in my ass.” I shrugged, a mocking smile on the corner of my lips.
    “You really have no idea how I feel about you, do you?” 
How was I supposed to know? This was all new to me. Besides, he’d hardly been obvious in his attentions to me. Maybe if he’d worn a neon sign. But he’d been an ass.
       “I kept trying to talk to you, but it always came out…wrong or you were pre-occupied” he sighed. “Then C.J asked me to look out for you and I saw it as a second chance. Call it my Darcy moment,” he smiled. "I just, I don’t understand what you’re scared of.” 
I was mute. What am I scared of?   
I’d denied my feelings and distanced myself since the day I first met him. Hating him was a better option than caring for him. But everything had changed.  

Jackson leaned forward, his Colgate fresh breath on my skin. 
    “Jackson, I…” The words choked me. “I think we need to stay focused.”

Now I'm off to read some of the other entries. Mwah! 


Ariel Swan said...

Hey great idea - I'm going to do this - as part of my writing resolutions I am hoping to participate more in the online writing world and to hopefully boost my online presence. So thanks for the idea...

Amparo Ortiz said...

Even though I am FOREVER Team C.J., have to admit I like me some Jackson in this scene. Ava, darling, you should totally give him a chance. :D

Missed these characters!

Sarah Ahiers (Falen) said...

ooh nice. I really liked the "pain in the ass" bit of dialogue

Jessica Lei said...

This was GREAT. I was right in the scene with them. Perfect details and nicely paced. I got a feeling for both characters immediately :) Thank you for sharing! I'd be interested in reading more :D

Devin Bond said...

I really like these characters, I could get a feel for them quite well. I wouldn't have minded reading more of it, that's for sure!

gideon 86 said...

Poor Jackson, getting iced. I've been in his situation.... it sucks.

Give the poor guy a


Christina Lee said...

*puts face in front of the fan* woo hoo, girlie! Excellent!

J.C. Martin said...

I liked the voice in this. Good build-up. Well done!

Frankie Diane Mallis said...

Hehe another almost kiss with a blue eyed Jackson:) I liked this scene a lot! Thanks so much for posting! :D

Amalia T. said...

I love this back and forth especially:

--“Of course I care. Why do you think I’ve been watching out for you?”
“Is that what it was? I thought you were being a pain in my ass.” I shrugged, a mocking smile on the corner of my lips.--

My favorite kind of hero!

Raquel Byrnes said...

So much sizzle for such a short excerpt. Poor Jackson.
Edge of Your Seat Romance

Nicole said...

Love the imagery and the tension! And I really liked the neon sign part.

Summer Ross said...

LOL, she told him didn't she- but staying focused isn't always whats on a guys mind. great scene!

Charity Bradford said...

Ooo! LOL, this was great. Sometimes losing focus is WAY more fun. Silly girl, but I like her.

Loralie Hall said...

Hehehe, awesomely cruel. It's too bad you had to cut some - I wanted to see more :-)

Dominic de Mattos said...

Awww ... so near, yet so far. Does Jackson have any idea why? *sigh* there are so many hidden currents here! Great little piece.

:Dom (My No Kiss)